Okay, I finally put up some kind of incentive for voting. If you vote, you'll get to see the near final version of the first page of chapter 1. Plenty of improvements there. Also, anyone who emails me will always get a response, if you haven't received a response, either you didn't get my email or maybe it's in your spam filter or something? People with yahoo and hotmail addresses sometimes don't get my emails. I always appreciate the supportive comments by email and on the forum. The forum is the best way to contact me and registration is quick and painless. Plus, all forum members get to see an extra page ahead of people not registered on the forum. So I'd appreciate more registrations and posters on the forum. Thanks!

When looking at them side by side there is a huge improvement. Great job.

Thanks, looking to make each page as good as possible for the print format.